April 06, 2004

barista inspiration for progressive poetry

The contents of my thermal mug this morning are screaming for poetic description that does justice to the myriad nuances of aging citrus. Screaming. I kid you not.

So here's the deal. I'll write the first line of this progressive-poem-to-be, and you can comment with your own line(s). I retain rights of censorship and the prerogative to tweak the final product. You retain zilch. Capische?

Here goes.

[1] When the orange juice is old, kind of sour and stale

Posted by joydriven at April 6, 2004 11:29 AM | TrackBack
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[2] I hate its metallic taste, like cheap ginger ale

Posted by: apelles at April 6, 2004 01:07 PM

[3] like I hate you, in my worst moments, when I'm cheap and unforgiven

Posted by: jeep at April 6, 2004 02:00 PM

[4] a dirty disobedient, offering flowers

Posted by: kammer at April 6, 2004 04:41 PM

[5] it sits on the shelf like a prisoner in jail
[6] dangling its feet over the shelf of a bed
[7] sagging its despised and dejected head
[8] although some would drink it, it's not for me
[9] the trash can is its destiny

Posted by: Lisa Lynnae at April 6, 2004 06:21 PM

[10] now i know who you are
[11] the one behind the coffer bar
[12] barista pour me something new
[13] replace my bitter, sickening brew

Posted by: apelles at April 8, 2004 12:49 PM

my tongue: parallel to magnetic forces opposing the bitter-sweet
although, sweet is still in Florida, all they packaged for me was bitter
for all i care, i may just go there, under the tree and wait for my bitter sweet to fall in my lap. But first, I'll need a map and something to wash this out.

Posted by: AmAnDa at April 9, 2004 08:36 AM

and wash me too, wash me until I am clean and I hear joy and gladness, until I am a poem a day
until I am a master of turning, of following

that's it--a sister of following, a sister of driving, of flying through the travelling mercies, a finder of Florida

Posted by: jeep at April 9, 2004 10:26 AM
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